Oh, YES. This is exactly what I needed after that movie. Not even the "Pete's ok" (which I'm not complaining about, believe you me) but just the aftermath, the pain and the grief. I love the way you included their sexual relationship in there, it didn't seem out of place at all, it seemed like something that could have fit right into the movie but was removed for time constraints or something. Great piece, doll, really fantastic.
I just noticed a couple little things, grammatically speaking. Everything else I thought was spot on. :)
Need a home port, don't I? You can have it but keep a room ready for me
Needs a period at the end, I think?
It's like you're punishing him for what my choices."
I think the "what" is misplaced in there.
I really need to go back and watch this movie now. ♥
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Date: 2008-07-06 06:49 am (UTC)I just noticed a couple little things, grammatically speaking. Everything else I thought was spot on. :)
Need a home port, don't I? You can have it but keep a room ready for me
Needs a period at the end, I think?
It's like you're punishing him for what my choices."
I think the "what" is misplaced in there.
I really need to go back and watch this movie now. ♥