. I have thinky thoughts about this fic if anyone is interested.
YAY for thinky thoughts. I am definitely interested in them :)
This is such a lovely fic. I'm not familiar with your style, so I can't obviously pick out what you may have done differently. The first time I read it, Sirius telling Remus to get out seemed to come out of nowhere, and my initial thought was that you hadn't prepared the audience for it.
But on my re-reads, there are all these perfect little hints all the way through, like this one especially:
"I'll miss this." "So have I," Remus answers absently.
So that even though there is all of this foreshadowing before the hammer comes down, I was just as stunned as Remus when it did, the first time I read this.
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Date: 2008-07-16 01:28 am (UTC)YAY for thinky thoughts. I am definitely interested in them :)
This is such a lovely fic. I'm not familiar with your style, so I can't obviously pick out what you may have done differently. The first time I read it, Sirius telling Remus to get out seemed to come out of nowhere, and my initial thought was that you hadn't prepared the audience for it.
But on my re-reads, there are all these perfect little hints all the way through, like this one especially:
"I'll miss this."
"So have I," Remus answers absently.
So that even though there is all of this foreshadowing before the hammer comes down, I was just as stunned as Remus when it did, the first time I read this.
Well done!